Mystery Houses

Room 8 have been working on starting their sentences in different ways. 

The Kidd-li-winks are authors. Read some of the amazing adventures.

"Wow' I said in my head when I was diving. I wondered what that beautiful thing was lying on the bottom of the ocean. Fish were surrounding the magical thing it was like an ice queens palace.The diamond looked like a chandelier diamond.

For one second I thought that it was a diamond ornament made for the ocean. There was a brown fish that looked like a piranha guarding the magical thing. Meanwhile the fish started chasing me. My flipper scraped against one of the diamonds. 

Suddenly something weird happened I turned into a piranha. I had one tail, two flippers, two eyes and sixty one scales. They showed me the revolting queen. 

The queen had two red eyes, two fangs, nine thousand scales. Within a room of dazzling diamonds there her tiaras lay. She put a tiara on and then a gown she said that she was pretty but she wasn't at all. 

When I turned around the queen noticed that I was actually a human being because one of my scales weren't brown. She chased me suddenly she stopped and started to lead me around the palace. There was a room with dazzling diamonds, with a secret door on the other side of the dazzling room. We entered the secret room there were golden crystals hanging from the ceiling.

Some how a great white shark came in with a school of sharks. We ran to the last room, we had enough time to slam the door but we didn't just slam the door we also slammed the sharks faces with the door. Then all the sharks teeth fell out. 

The queen asked me if I would like to stay. I said "No thanks". I touched the diamond and quickly swam up to the surface turning back into a human.

Written by Faith 

Faith's goal has been to break her writing up into paragraphs. Didn't she do well?

Shining through the light there was a mini diamond the colours were light blue and pearl white and it was surrounded by sea green sea weed. Finally I got to go and explore the sea. Yahoo! I saw a giat diamond house and as well a diamond door that was shining. So I swam to it and... as soon as I opened the door I saw everything. Next I saw a computer and a xbox 360 and a xbox 1. The xbox was made to control 200 fish. They could go up down left and right. So I started to control the fish. Wibble wobble the fish went into the cave. When I went to look around the place I saw a submarine. So I heard Dad yelling out loudly to me. I went into the submarine. Toot Aye! "Who is there?" shouted a lady. She had a scratchy voice. As soon as I find out who it was it actually was a man that was a doctor and a scientist. he was evil. I tried to escape but he threw me out the window. Huuuuh Huuuh I swam to the top of the sea. I could see the controlled fish!

Written by Tobias

Toby worked really hard to begin his sentences in different ways. Looks at all his different sentence starters.

"Aaaaaah!" "Max Max why did you faint at the bottom of the ocean?" "Dad dad I saw an emerald house!!" "What?" Dad and I raced to et scuba gear at he beach house. "Max do you promise you wont faint again" "I promise." We dove into the diamond freezing clear water. However the tide was going out. We began to see the diamond house more clearly. In sign language I said "I need to tell you something Dad" and I swam to the surface. I said "Did you see the fish woman?" "No what does she look like?" "Legs of a human, body of a fish, fins of a fish, arms of a human and one half of her body long ways is a skeleton." However my Dad had his emergency knife so we hid behind seaweed but the gaps in the seaweed made our faces glitter on all of the diamonds sides. "That fish women looks more than evil! She looks cruel". "When those ratbags come in we'll be ready mwoohahah" the fish woman laughed her evil laugh. "Uhh, they have barricaded the door. How are we going to get in?" "I never thought we would do this but Youch!" The door flung open. the diamonds went flying. We charged at the fish women. She had eyes on her hands. She shot purple lazer beams out of those eyes. "Dad watch out for those laser beams" I screamed. We dodged the laser. Dad threw the emergency knife at me. dad kept her busy. I found a weak spot and stabbed her. She screamed horribly and fell to the diamond floor.

Author Max 

Max has been learning to use speech marks in his writing. He did well with all the talking in this writing. 

Splish splash as the water splashed on my face. My brother said "I'm getting bored, I'm going to get out of here". When I had a swim I nearly got out until twinkle sparkle I gasped to Mum "Mum Mum I see a bright light". Mum gasped back "Go and get it. Here are some things to help you breathe under the sea." After a while there was a colossal colossal...diamond! It had a diamond door. After when I got inside a sound came from the kitchen. It was a voice calling "Emma Emma" I was terrified so I went into the kitchen but...the kitchen was red. Everything else in the diamond was blue. I was looking for the voice. I looked in the cupboards. In the largest cupboard I saw two eyes blue and red. It was a girl. She needs a bath because she smelled really really bad. Her dress was old and ranky and a a yucky brown colour. She had a name. Her name was...Bell. She had a red eye and a blue eye. Blue eye on the left and red eye on the right. She chased me out to shore and that is why I am scared of the sea.

Author Emma

Emma has been working on starting her sentences in different ways. This made her writing flow. 

"Daddy can I explore the sea?" "Ok" Ouch I stepped my foot on a glowing thing. When I stepped on top of it I thought of an idea. I could go under to get a better view of the diamond house. I saw with my big fat eye a frozen snapper in this diamond. I saw a password machine. I wondered if the password was snapper. I typed it in "Bleep blop bleep blop mi mi. You may pass". What that is unusual. Machines shouldn't talk. I wanted to get OUT because there is a lochness monster. It must have been trapped under the diamond for years. I think that I shall pull it out because I want to be a millionaire and he might want to be free, right? "Ya, I must do what I shall do". So I pulled that diamond and got what we both wanted. He was happy to be free. The diamond was pretty heavy. I gathered all of the people on the beach. I said "3,2,1 heave!". We put it on the back of a truck. This diamond could cost a fortune. We sold it to a diamond dealer. We were rich. 

Author Czar

Czar worked really hard to create an interesting ending. Isn't it a great ending?

In the distance I saw a shining sparkling thing under the water. I muttered to myself "Should I tell Mum or should I just wait?" "Umm should I tell Mum?" "Mum! Mum! Mum!, I can see a shiny sparkly thing in the water. Can I go and see what it is?" Mum said "Yes dear you can". I dived into the water. When I got there I saw a big crystal house and it was protected by sharks, dolphins, puffer fish, eels, swordfish, hammerhead sharks and turtles. It has rainbow colours all around the house. If you look closely you see little people. Finally I had to figure a way to get all of the animals to go away. I found some food for the sharks and other animals. It was some fish to give to them. They all swam away. Just then I was starting to lose my breath. However I dived back down to the diamond house. When I got there I saw a door with a password, door lock and electric door gate. I jumped over the electric door gate and found a button under a rock. I pushed it and bubble bubble bubble came out of my mouth. At last I was up to the last door. It was the pass code 19566713101113. I went into the diamond house and saw a little town with lots of little people. I found a hotel with a big sign saying 'One more bedroom for rent' so I went inside and it had everything that I needed. It was brilliant so I swam back out to ask mum if I could stay there for a few weeks. Mum answered "How can you breathe under water?" "It is protected. It has oxygen in the house". Mum asked "Where will you stay?" I said " It is a kids human sized hotel with one more room for rent and I have taken it for rent. I loved it. It has everything I need. Can I please, pretty please. When I came back I will do anything you want for as long as I have been gone." "Ok then darling" answered mum. I swam back to the hotel. 

Author Mya

Mya has been working on beginning her sentences in different ways. You can see how well she thought about this.